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Just Lie

"...and another thing.  I've had to look after the stupid dog and your goldfish."  Her eyes blazed with emotion and she counted off on her fingers.  "Bills to pay, meals to cook, the kids are always screaming for something, the shower's broken," she looked down at him, "and you just lie there, doing nothing."  
Her tears dropped on his headstone.

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©2007-2009 ~IceDragon64
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Various people, especially women, thought it showed a poinient view of a sad woman's position-
I wrote it thinking of the man's point of view, of being interminably nagged, however it was edited to be more sensitive.

This one WON the Fish Micro-Fiction competition in August 2007! It went on to be OVERALL prose WINNER of the Microfiction series of 2007, under the title "Don't Just Lie There". It is now being made into a film short.
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and an amazing 60 word story it is

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At last I have figured out how to upload other things! Thanks to the help section of the Chat Room! Now I can begin to show my versatility
Thank you r74. Its a good start. I will upload some more over the next few days.

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